CRAZY-HORSE Wrote:WE are music lovers here and not musicians, we cant offer tips and critiques in the form you want

WE either like or dislike music, if we find it appealing, we like it, if we don't, we wont like it, its that simple

I suggest that if you require commentary on the actual specifics and techniques involved in what you have done
then all i can suggest is that you seek out a musicians forum, post your material there and receive the proper
constructive comment you desire.

uncle salty Wrote:Ok, I'll give you a serious answer.

I should preface this by letting you know that I played in some bands in my youth, so I have more than just a passing knowledge of music and its inner workings.

I played drums to start, which led to my dabbling with guitar (still do, kinda), and keyboards.

Secondly, when I'm listening to a new song, I never, neverwatch the video.

The music has to stand on it's own, live or die on it's own merits, without the window dressing to sway my opinion.

Don't get me wrong, I like music videos as much as the next person.

They have the capability to do a great job of visually conveying an emotion that may deepen the meaning of a song.

I just think it's kind of a shame that being visually pleasing is as important, if not more important, than the song itself.



So, with that long-winded, self aggrandizing, pseudo-intellectual preamble out of the way...



I listened to this cut a handful of times, and honestly, nothing really jumps out as setting itself apart from any other techno pop cut.

It's got a full sound, but it's borderline over-busy, especially during the vocals.

Everything is going on the entire time. Strip it down some, dude.

Fool around with it, experiment. Leave some hollow spots behind the vocals, see if it adds something by taking something away.

Jerome Wrote:I agree - less is more.