Can anyone improve on this?

[ambernector]

Hi all, Beach, Tiggi and myself have been working on changing the text that is displayed to Unregistered members. We feel that the existing, does not encourage enough or tell people what makes MD different.

This is the existing text that is currently being shown to unregistered visitors;

Music Discussion is the straight forward music forum for a worldwide audience of music lovers. Join MD now to have full access to all that we have to offer! Don’t be satisfied with lurking when you can interact with like minded people – Register Now!

This is the proposed revised version we have come up with;

Music Discussion is the back to basics straight forward thinking music forum for a worldwide audience. Join MD now to have full access to all that we have to offer!


What makes Music Discussion unique?

• This is completely an advertisment free environment
  
• We have gone 'back to basics' with Music Discussion, keeping the aim around quality discussions and good member interaction
  
• Each new member is vetted at first, so we can eliminate spam and unwanted advertisements that can clutter so many forums.
  
• In addition, an area for links and social groups are available to share musical sites and experiences.
  

Don’t be satisfied with lurking when you can interact with like minded people – Register Now!

We welcome any comments or feedback, which can be good or bad. :wink: Ideally we want ideas of how it could be improved further.