Never written a song

[Syn]

as the title says, i wouldnt even call it s asong or tune, feel free to rip good line out of it (if there are any)

the night realeases me from it cold clutches
it fingers let breath in once again
the light burns my eyes
telling me leave this waking dream i do not know

the 3 realities i live in everyday
are splitting my soul asunder
who am i really?
why dont you know the ansawer?!

I dive in and dissaper from this world i do not know
i become my hidden self
i am calm and can breath slow

this reality is comfortable
i feel less pain here
your memory is clouded
my hatred seems less clear

watching this fake reality swiftly disappear
i am awake once more
dreading the hatred takeing hold
once again upon my chest

I dive in and dissaper from this world i do not know
i become my hidden self
to cope all alone, its all i know

while i sleep you have to left me
while i wake you are so far
im am coming to join you
1 more step, the fall is far

nothing great, tbh wouldnt even call it good, had ten mins at work to fill
that is the result would be interesting to read what you think

[Tiggi]

Bloody hell !!

If you really wrote that, and haven't just lifted it from some obscure bands' website (Only jesting), you should consider developing this.

What sort of music do you envisage ??

[Syn]

i have no idea, i like rock and metal but me thinks it is too nice for that

[Syn]

Night realeases me from its cold clutches
fingers relax and let breath
bitter sunlight burns my eyes shut
ordering me leave this dream i do not know

3 realities i live in everyday and everynight
are tearing my soul asunder
who am i really? what am i doing?
why dont you know the ansawer?!

I dive in and dissaper from this world i do not know
i become my hidden self
i am calm and can breath slow

my fake reality is comfortable
there less pain from you here
your memory is clouded
my hatred seems less clear

watching this fake reality swiftly disappear
i am awake once more
waiting for the hatred to take hold
once again upon my chest

I dive in and dissaper from this world i do not know
i become my hidden self
to cope all alone, its all i know

while i sleep you have not left me
while i wake you are so far
im am coming to join you
1 more step, the fall is far



Little bit changed let me know what you think?

stick to the day job huh? or go and runaway to become a millionair songwrtier?

[briannaballistic:)]

Hmm...thats really good.

For the music part, acoustic BUT, if you can do this, with a little screaming, the soft kind.


Or do that thing thats like half screaming half singing. If you dont know what I mean check out The Day I Left The Womb by Escape The Fate, the second verse and pretty much on from there.

Or keep it light and add heavy guitar riffs between verses. Maybe start out heavier and get softer as the riff goes on.

Just a thought.

Or it still would be really pretty just soft a light.

[Ruhi Sheikh]

a nice attempt for a beginner.
Have you ever tried writing something on patriotism?

Ruhi Sheikh
Financial Reviewer,
http://economynews.in/

[Syn]

never, you mean the subject?

[Ruhi Sheikh]

yup. i mean have you ever tried writing anything related to patriotism or on political learning's.


Ruhi Sheikh,
Financial Reviewer,
http://economynews.in/

[ambernector]

You should try sending some off to record companies, got nothing to loose and everything to gain. :nod:

[Syn]

i wouldnt know where to start with sending it somewhere, as for the patronism never could always give it a try though.